Descriptive Narrative?

Hey everyone!
So for class today I have to write a decriptive narrative about my most exciting moment. Here it goes!

As the music started to play my nerves increased. I fixed my large gray hat with millions of shiny black feathers and fake pink roses along with my black leather gloves, smiled at the people passing us, and said good luck to all my friends as they showed me nervous looks. And as the seconds flew by our time had come. The colorguard and I raced into the field, holding the edges of our long gray dresses with lace in little splits on the ends. The crowd cheered and we performed. Ending the show with thousands of claps and shouts and cheers, along with a standing ovation. We had done it again. The Lake Central Tribe of Pride had wowed the crowd.
The moon turned brighter by the second as hundreds of people started to crowd around the semi truck. It's been only a matter minutes since the Lake Central Tribe of Pride was called as the very last band to go on to State Finals. Everyone was smiling and a pickup truck near by was handing out cookies for everyone. The whole crowd was chatting and eating popcorn and cookies when Mr. Harmon, the band director, stood up in the back of the semi truck wearing his usual hat,sunglasses, and orange windbreaker. "Congradulations," He said, "This, ladies and gentleman, is the 6th time in a row that we've gone to State!"
The group cheered and clapped, shouting into the wind. Other bands passed by and stared. Mr. Harmon tried to silence the band and continued.
"For the next three performances, it'll be 72 and sunny!" He yelled smiling. Again the crowd cheered as Mr. Harmon explained how great the performance was. At that exact moment, I completely forgot that it was freezing, or that we had a super long bus ride home. We were going to state finals! That's all that mattered! I was so incredibly excited that I bounced and cheered along with the rest of the band and colorguard. All my friends huddled together to keep warm and talk about the show. It was, in my opinion, the most exciting moment of the entire year.